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[MightyMario]

The first paragraph explains the character’s situation and describes each of the family and their actions. I don’t see how it’s out of place.

 

[OGSniper]

One question. Is there a narrator?

 

[OGSniper]

Like an active narrator who is telling the story.

 

[MightyMario]

One question. Is there a narrator?

No

 

[MightyMario]

Like an active narrator who is telling the story.

Then I would be using first person, not third person

 

[OGSniper]

Okay, good, good, good, good, good. I think the line that is throwing me off is the line-

"Thankfully, the temperature had dropped from a blistering heat to a warm breeze.''

Who is thankful in this sentence?

 

[MightyMario]

Okay, good, good, good, good, good. I think the line that is throwing me off is the line-

"Thankfully, the temperature had dropped from a blistering heat to a warm breeze.''

Who is thankful in this sentence?

It’s saying that the family is relieved the temperature had dropped.

 

[OGSniper]

Hmm......okay. I guess because it wasnt specified I thought that someone else "outside" of the story was telling the tale.

 

[ArchAngel217]

So, about this narration thing (if you need my credentials, they're that I'm good at writing and I have formal training from a college professor) third person doesn't necessarily mean that there is an active narrator. It is just an objective standpoint of writing the story, in which there is no true perspective (you're not looking at the world from the lens of any of the characters). It doesn't need to be specified that someone outside the story was telling the tale because there isn't really someone telling the tale. Third person is just a means of awakening the imagination in a way that doesn't use first-person pronouns.

 

[MightyMario]

So, about this narration thing (if you need my credentials, they're that I'm good at writing and I have formal training from a college professor) third person doesn't necessarily mean that there is an active narrator. It is just an objective standpoint of writing the story, in which there is no true perspective (you're not looking at the world from the lens of any of the characters). It doesn't need to be specified that someone outside the story was telling the tale because there isn't really someone telling the tale. Third person is just a means of awakening the imagination in a way that doesn't use first-person pronouns.

This is the best explanation, thanks.

 

[OGSniper]

So, about this narration thing (if you need my credentials, they're that I'm good at writing and I have formal training from a college professor) third person doesn't necessarily mean that there is an active narrator. It is just an objective standpoint of writing the story, in which there is no true perspective (you're not looking at the world from the lens of any of the characters). It doesn't need to be specified that someone outside the story was telling the tale because there isn't really someone telling the tale. Third person is just a means of awakening the imagination in a way that doesn't use first-person pronouns.

SHEEEEEEEEEEESH. Wow. Now this, was very much needed. What you said was sorta what I was trying to say. That was why I brought up the whole movie thing. Because in a movie, there normally isn't a narrator (like you said, the story tells itself.) unless the movie introduces a narrator-like Disney's Aladdin does. So when I read that sentence that I was confused about, I didnt know who was being thankful, an unknown narrator or whatever. That is basically what I was getting at. I assumed (My bad) that there was a narrator because I didnt misunderstand a sentence, so I started to asking questions about a narrator. Like I said, your post was a God-send. You must really be an ArchAngel.

Okay, let me read the prologue again.

 

[OGSniper]

I dont know @MightyMario, I still think that whoever is thankful should be clarified.

 

[OGSniper]

But dont change it if you dont want to.

 

[Uwu_Oocoo2]

Me: "I'm so confused why do people think I'm emo?"
Also me: Is wearing black shoes, black pants, black Jean jacket, black and grey fingerless gloves, and a grey shirt that says "buzz off"

 

[ArchAngel217]

You must really be an ArchAngel.

Yeah, please don't say that. I appreciate the compliment, but that's super far from what I am.

Either way, I'm glad I could be of help!!

Me: "I'm so confused why do people think I'm emo?"
Also me: Is wearing black shoes, black pants, black Jean jacket, black and grey fingerless gloves, and a grey shirt that says "buzz off"

Right, though! That's totally relatable.